The Prayer.A poem I made 4 Kikyo

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The Prayer.A poem I made 4 Kikyo; Rated K+
Topic Started: Aug 21 2006, 12:31 AM (224 Views)
Goodgirl_710	Aug 21 2006, 12:31 AM Post #1
Captain Posts: 62 Group: Members Member #27 Joined: July 9, 2005	Hope u guys like this! Life after Death athWhen the River runs red With the Blood of Innocence And the sun bows it's head in Shame For what it has Seen When the ground draws Away For the Fear of touching Horror And the Clouds refuse to Wash Away the Evidence The world will Burn in Hatered From every Face I'm gonna add more after I get some replies
	Sticks and stones may break my bones but chains and whips excite me! I'm not at the crossroads of my life, I'm in the opposing traffic! Sorry...I don't date outside my species You Earthlings have such strang eating habbits Theres nice...Theres naughty...Theres me Anime... It's not just for breakfast anymore


Tomocat	Aug 21 2006, 07:32 AM Post #2
Lt. Colonel Posts: 394 Group: Members Member #26 Joined: July 6, 2005	I like it alot! It is very good. I would maybe consider the format though. It causes to many pauses. I think it flows nicely word-wise though! I like that is does not rhyme. I like rhymes, but I think if you can get away with NOT using them, then your poem must be good. I think there might be a typo in the first line. "athWhen the River runs red"
	Keeper of Mulder's reading glasses, Trowa's circus mask, Dylan's love, and Lagato's real arm It is better to be pissed off then to be pissed on. "I was all alone in my room, when all of a sudden, out of nowhere......the smell of a fart that wasn't mine wafted into my nose." - Osaka (azumanga diaoh)


Pipster	Oct 23 2006, 01:56 AM Post #3
Pervy VA Fancier Posts: 815 Group: Henchmen Member #8 Joined: May 21, 2005	Very nice!



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